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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations

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There are employees that devote their entire lives to working for
one
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 company, whereas some employees believe that working for multiple organizations is beneficial. In my opinion, people should experience more than
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 workplace On the
one
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 hand, there are a group of people who choose to dedicate their entire lives to working with
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 organization only. The reason for the following is the stability that can be obtained by working at the same place for a longer time.
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, helps the employees understand the core business of the corporation better and get thorough with all the internal systems, processes, and policies.
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, the overall experience
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 increases the probability of future recognitions, appraisals, and promotions. Most of the folk in
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 category are from an older generation who believe in job security.
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, there are
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 who believe it's best to switch jobs to for getting better exposure.
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 helps them get a broader viewpoint of the industry as a whole and does not limit them to just understanding the business of an individual company. These set of
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 believe in growth over job security and are extremely passion-driven.
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, switching jobs
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 helps increase their financial compensation,
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 making them financially independent at a very young age.
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, they become
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 with higher market value due to
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 a holistic background. To conclude,
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 there are benefits to working for
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 organization, I feel that
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 should choose to serve multiple companies in order to get a broader understanding. As long as it is planned carefully, I feel the change is good and will ultimately benefit both the employer and the employee.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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