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Many educators believe that international exchange trips are beneficial for students . Do you agree or disagree.

#educators #exchange #trips #students
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whether
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the
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international
exchange
 trips are beneficial for students has been sparking debate for several years. While I didn't take part
of
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 any
exchange
 program, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
this
 kind of experience
are
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is
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 crucial
in
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for
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 the development of
an
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 future global citizen.
Firstly
, the
exchange
 trips give the opportunity to the students to travel
in
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 another country often for a long term, which means that the students are forced to leave their comfort zone and learn a new language, new lifestyle and new people. It gives the opportunity to face their limits and it's an unrepeatable
self development
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 accelerator.
Secondly
,
this
 experience
train
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trains
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 the future generation to live in
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multi-cultural
behavior
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 which means that in future we will decrease the
intollerance
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intolerance
 and the
raczisme
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racism
. After taking into consideration all the points made above, I believe
that is
 very important
taking
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to take
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 part
into
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in
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exchange
 programs for
pesonal
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personal
 and cultural
pointstands
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point stands
.
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