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Every country has poor people and every country 5tghas different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can we do to help the poor? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the
last
 few decades, especially in developing
countries
,
poverty
 has become an enormous issue in these areas. Each country has poor people but other
nacionalities
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nationalities
 have plans to deal with
this
. In the following
paragraphs
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 I will discuss
whether
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the reasons for
poverty
,
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 and give some solutions to
this
 problem so I can reach a
resonable
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reasonable
 conclusion. It is true to say that poorness is all around the world, and in my
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opinion
oppinion
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opinion
, it is due to surprises and bad organization by the government and some authorities. One of
main
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 problems are people who
inmigrate
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immigrate
migrate
 from
countries
 that have
economical
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an economical
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 crisis, like Venezuela or Cuba.
For instance
, Bolivia and many
countries
 like Chile or Argentina receive thousands of Venezuelans. The grand
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majority
mayority
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majority
 of these individuals are living on the streets, begging for money, so they can buy something to eat.
However
, there is a big solution and the government should consider
in
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applying these
suggestion
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within
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 their population. Eventually, give
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immigrants
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inmigrants
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immigrants
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 jobs. The feeling of working sometimes makes you feel better and makes you
to
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improve
their
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 skills on the job.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
,
this
 is a huge incentive to earn money and combat
poverty
. In conclusion, there is no denying that
poverty
 has become a nightmare for authorities. Especially with
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immigrants
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inmigrants
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immigrants
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that
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they
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 need a
second
 opportunity to live. The best solution is
give
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 them jobs, not only so they can develop themselves but
also
 can help to the economy of those
countries
 that
applies
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this
 effective method.
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