some people say that the older generation has a better quality of life due to simple life style did not envolve high tech gadget

Nowadays,
technology
is developing
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unexpectedly
. Some people believe that the previous generation’s
life
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of
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there were not using high
technology
devices
such
as smart mobile
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or
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. I disagree
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aforementioned statement. In
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first
of all, seniors have through decades when
technology
have
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not yet
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up
then
they have familiar with a lifestyle without online communication.
for instance
, the senior read
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newspaper
in
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morning
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and listen to music on
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.
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, these are
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way
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communication
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that
reader
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and listener are significantly difficult to exchange
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or contribute their ideas to social problems. It is not much helpful to improve instantly and quality of their
life
as well as
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community.
on the other hand
,
technology
enable
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us to do huge tasks that would have been unthinkable. we can bank online, book holidays,
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our online
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shoppings
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. We can do amazing things with
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technology
. there are dangers
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heavily on devices so much.
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our
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life
is controlled by them, that without them,
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would not be impossible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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