government needs to spend more money to encourage the development of artsand sports in schools, rather than to support professional arts and sport events . to what extent you agree or disagree ?
It is often believed that
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the same
events
held professionally . I partially accord
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reasons
same
in upcoming paragraphs .
on the one hand , if government upgrade the various facilities Correct article usage
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as refurbishmemt
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then
it will only save its future expenses . To illustrate , by participating in different sports ,students will already imbibe the skills needed in future and hence
expertise at various games in their formative years only which will eventually save the authorities
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authorities'
otherwise
on professional training of players later on . Moreover
, art competitions like singing and painting are a great means in
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Therefore
, it necessitates authorities to employ grants for these events
in schools as well .
On the other hand
, there are many national and international art concerts organised with government 's
aid where many professional artists Correct article usage
the government 's
such
as singers and dancers participate and get an opportunity to showcase their skills . If administration
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the administration
such
events
, it will not only benefit participants but also
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represent
a country globally and thereby putting the money to great use .
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