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Older people often choose to spend money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is often seen that
instead
 of saving
money
 for
own
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their own
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children
, older people are seen spending
money
 on themselves like going
holidays
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on holidays
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. It depends on the financial stability of the family whether to decide
this
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whether this
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 is a positive or negative development. Provided that the family is
financial
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financially
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 stable, one could definitely say that the trend is positive.
This
 is because these older people must have saved enough all
through
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 their productive life for their
children
’s education and related needs. They have sacrificed a good part of their life, earning for their
children
, and it is quite logical to have some time for themselves to entertain and relax before they get
bed-ridden
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. Usually,
this
 happens only after retirement, and in a decade or two, they would not be able to spend
money
 for themselves except for medical needs and geriatric care.
On the other hand
, it becomes irrational if the family’s financial status is not secure. To be precise, even if these people must have earned well, and they have all the right to spend their
money
 in the way
in
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which they need, they cannot evade their responsibility to secure the future of their
children
. A part of their post-retirement savings is to be kept untouched for the well-being of their
children
.
This
 is possible only if they have earned enough and have enough savings. Unless and until they cannot do
this
, it is unjustifiable for them to spend their
money
 themselves. To conclude, it is clear that it becomes positive for a person to spend his post-retirement earnings
,
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 if he has enough financial reserve for his family. If happens the other way, it would be a disaster.
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