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Some people think that children's free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion?

#people #children #time #activities #waste
Younger
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have
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 their free
time
. It is suggested that
children
 should spend their break with informative activities that will enable them to learn something,
otherwise
,
time
 is wasted. In my view, a child should be given the freedom to choose what kind of play they want
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in order to achieve maximum enjoyment and
also
, for them to develop skills and talents that they are interested
to
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. Like adults,
children
 need
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a break from their routine. The most common way of relaxation for them is playing.
For instance
, during
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, a lot of students are given free hours, to do whatever they want. By doing so,
children
 are being more obedient to comply with school activities during weekdays knowing that they will have their freedom after
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 days.
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 reason why adults should not focus on giving
children
 educational tasks alone is to allow the
children
 to find out their own talents and skills that they want to gain. It is important to
the
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 talents and skills at a young age. Most of the
time
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these traits are inborn and will automatically manifest in a child's actions. An example of
this
 is dancing. Some people are born graceful, it will be evident
on
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 the way they stand, walk
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of
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 even carry things.
This
 talent, which can be very useful in the future, can
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 if an opportunity will be given.
Instead
 of forcing someone to memorize all the flags of the world, spending
time
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 dance classes will be beneficial. In conclusion, It is evident that giving liberty to the younger population to choose the activity to spend their
time
 with is beneficial for
self improvement
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 and future
career
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, rather than forcing academic activities.
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