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These two maps compare the present area around Stewart Airport and its future projection for 2045. Overall, while some facilities and places will be unchanged in size and location, others are expected to newly be built and expanded. What stands out in these two maps are the newly constructed facilities, namely the shopping malls and the football stadium. The former is due to be installed in the place
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 a Wasteland now is positioned, The latter is to be built in 2045 at the right-hand bottom corner. Factories will make way for constructing the new football stadium. Focusing
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 on the central part of these maps. The new railway which
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 to the Stewart Airport will be newly built, so a scrubland will be demolished and
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farmland is projected to be
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 in size. On the final point to note is a road, which
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 the Airport with the
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 top of
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 road is projected to be renovated and will become straight.
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