IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

#work #points
Nowadays, a
work
-
life
 correlation has been a controversial debate in society about whether we
work
 to live or we live in order to
work
.
However
, I would argue that
work
 is a tool we might carry our
life
 without it, but
life
 should be thinking considerable about it.
This
 essay will discuss both views as well as give my humble opinion.
First
 of all, these days money plays a crucial role in order to continue feeding ourselves.
This
 means, that if you do not have economic independence
life
 can not be performed. A recent study shows that every day some inhabitants lose their
life
 due to famine.
Hence
, if individuals want to survive in our days they must have income in order to be fed.
On the other hand
, in the contemporary era people's thoughts have changed and these days more and more people are thinking about their well-being.
That is
 to say, we have a short-term
life
 expectancy and
this
 time should be spent not only working to make money but
also
this
 is so significant, have a
life
 better full of joy and happiness.
This
 motto has been adopted by the new generation. In conclusion, different ideas can bring different considerations,
work
-
life
 balance has been considered by many individuals whether which side is more important or less significant. I would say that and
this
 is my slogan, even though living without
work
 can be hard, my opine is
life
 should be the
first
 consideration to think about
that is
 to say we weren't born for
work
.
Submitted by cmnr3134 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • financial stability
  • personal development
  • career advancement
  • fulfillment
  • leisure
  • self-care
  • burnout
  • stress
  • setting boundaries
  • professional success
  • personal satisfaction
  • harmonious balance
  • purpose and structure
What to do next:
Look at other essays: