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overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem what are the causes of this ?how can this problem be solved?

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It has been observed that more and more
people
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 migrate to metropolitan
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, developed
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 become overcrowded. There are several factors and remedies for
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 an issue. Both the aspects are elaborated on in the ensuing paragraphs Scrutinizing the cause ,
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 with, big cities became unhealthy for survival. In other ,words
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 migrate to countings for a better lifestyle because developed cities not only give good animals but
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 give well education to children.
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, the devastation of the green environment increases pollution. To elaborate, the high demand for living place
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 flats, and bangles are getting population and congestion it creates difficulty to breathe, as a ,
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 most
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the
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 are suffering some disease
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 asthma, cancer and many more. In order to improve the ,
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situation some steps can be taken.
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, developing backward
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. By I mean that the government should take action towards undeveloped cities,
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, the authority should be improved some amenities like water supply, roadway and
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 Improve education sector for children despite of entrepreneurs be motivated and Commercial sector provides employment and work opportunities
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people
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 do not migrate from one place to another place. In conclusion, migration is reducing some greenery and spreading disease; It has to be controlled before
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 delay . It is crucial to improve the undeveloped
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. A nation can be developed when every habitat will be having enough facilities and basic needs.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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