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Some people think children should obey the rules their parents and teachers set and listen to them, but others think less control will help children to deal with their future adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that
rules
 and
regulations
 set by teachers and parents have
a
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great importance in the
life
 of
children
 and others think differently ,when
children
 have less control, they can deal better in their future adult
life
. In
this
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 we will elaborate
further
of
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 the two
mindset
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 of raising
children
 with
rules
 and without
rules
. I strongly believe that setting
rules
 with
children
 definitely contributes
in
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disciplinating
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disciplining
 them,
furthermore
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 they know how to behave in society and are aware of dangers.
For example
, if a
child
 is taught that a knife is dangerous to play
, there
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 is less risk that
this
child
 is injured. Whereas if a
child
 has liberty and no pressure, he thinks that he can do anything he wants. I believe that from the age gap from zero to eleven years old,
rules
 and
regulations
 have an important place in the
life
 of a
child
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 Gradually, when the
child
 grows up and
turn
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to
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 a teenager, he has already embedded the culture of discipline and he has his own judging about what is good and wrong. So
rules
 and
regulations
 should be taken up with a different aspect as
children
grows
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 into an adult. When analysing
a
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society with
children
 who have grown up with
rules
, they are more discipline in all aspects, waking up early, they know at what time they should watch TV, study and rest. Whereas
children
 who
are
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are left with little control have the tendency to misbehave. Having grown up with
rules
 and
regulations
, I strongly believe they are crucial in a
child
's
life
 and upbringing. I am completely against letting a
child
 with less control as facts have shown that
children
 who are less disciplined have the tendency to turn
in
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 delinquent and misbehave in society.
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