Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantage of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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The diagram explains the process of smoked

fish

from capturing

fish

from the ocean body to the local

fish

shop.

Firstly

fish

is captured through fishing nets and these are rowed through boats towards nearby ports.

Then

, to ensure freshness,

fish

are transferred to the freezer from ports. Whenever fishes are ready to cut open, they are

first

rinsed with fresh water and

then

sent to the butchering area to cut open and remove any inedible organs.

Then

, the

fish

are cured in the salt water bath and yellow colouring is added to give the

fish

flavour and colour.

Then

, fishes are sent to the smoking chamber where they are smoked to give them a smoky flavour and

also

prevent them from it getting spoiled. These fishes are

then

packed in the containers and again frozen at 0 degrees Centigrade and sent towards cold storage for better preservation before going through the distribution process. These packets are

then

taken from cold storage to trucks and

then

through these trucks are

then

sent towards the local

fish

shop to sell.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

179 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantage of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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