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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Population plays a vital role in the country’s success. Nowadays, residents of
few
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 countries have
comparatively
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a comparatively
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 bigger
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numbers
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 of young individuals than the
number
of
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older
people
.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend and
also
 elaborate,
why
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on why
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 the drawbacks of
this
 situation outweigh the
benefits
.
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the population
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 of the younger
people
 is beneficial for the economy of the country. Young
adults
 are more effective and efficient
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compared to
the
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older
people
.
For example
, the young
adults
 working in a factory can do all the heavy work whereas, the aged
people
 find it difficult to do so. Another advantage of
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 in
number
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a number
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 of the young
adults
,
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 can help to serve the country in many ways.
The young
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adults
 can serve in
military
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the military
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, police and air force.
For instance
,
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older
people
 can not fight wars. They are used to
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 light work
whereas
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,
the
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young
adults
 can be handy in all sorts of situations.
However
, though, these advantages pale in comparison to
benefits
. Despite the
benefits
, there are numerous disadvantages associated with
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a decrease
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 in
population
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the population
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 of aged persons.
Firstly
, experience comes with age. The older the person, the more experience he has. To illustrate,
mostly
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people
 working at bigger posts in companies are older
people
, that’s because of the knowledge and experience they have.
Secondly
,
decrease
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 in
number
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a number
the number
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 of the older
people
 can directly affect the education of the country.
In particular
,
majority
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the majority
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 of professors, doctors and teachers are aged so,
declined
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 in their numbers has
direct
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 effect on education as the expertise would not pass on to the generation. To conclude,
this
 essay argued the
benefits
 and the drawbacks of
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the rise
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rise
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rising
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 in
number
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a number
the number
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 of the young
adults
 as compared to
the
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apply
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aged
people
. In my opinion
although
,
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 there are
benefits
 to
rise
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the rise
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 in
the
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young
adults
, the drawbacks clearly outweigh them.
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