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Happiness is considered very important in life.Why is it difficult to define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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It is undeniable that
happiness
 plays a pivotal role in
people
’s daily life. While the nature of
happiness
 often makes it hard to define, there are still some common elements that
people
 share to reach
happiness
. One reason that makes defining
happiness
 a challenging task is that the factor that triggers
happiness
 can vary from person to person; different individuals can experience the feeling of joy based on various reasons.
For example
, some
people
 might be joyous by making fortune, while others can experience the same emotion through earning a sense of achievement and other factors.
Thus
 classifying and defining
happiness
 is barely possible. Another problem is that
happiness
 can
also
 be related to other emotions,
such
 as excitement or satisfaction; the intricate relation between different feelings has made the definition of
happiness
 even harder. Though giving a lucid definition of
happiness
 might be difficult, there are still some basic factors for an individual to reach. Undeniably,
people
 cannot derive a sense of
happiness
 when they are starving or lack safety. It is to say that to reach
happiness
, a person’s basic physical demand has to be catered to. Another common factor is companions, humans as social animal need to socialize and interact with other individuals, without the accompaniment of friends or families, it is unlikely that a person can experience
happiness
 in
this
 predicament. In conclusion,
happiness
 is difficult to define as it is particular to each individual and to fully understand others' feelings is nearly possible,
however
, I believe the precondition of experiencing
happiness
 is that
people
 have to have enough food, shelter and accompany, only these factors are fulfilled,
people
 can have the chance to derive
happiness
.
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