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Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends. Do you agree or disagree?

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study
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studying
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main
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the main
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subjects
 and
finish
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 all the examination is crucial for the future of the
students
, I do
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that less important
subjects
 should not
study
from
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by
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other
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others
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other
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 people
instead
 of teachers.
To begin
 with, friends and family are not professional to teach
students
 the right way and the correct theory to practice their cookery, dressmaking and
woodmaker
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wood maker
 skills.
Therefore
,
students
 should learn those
subjects
 from the experts at school so that they can avoid
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an accident
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accident
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accidents
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 in
woodmaking
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wood making
. In
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addition
accdition
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addition
,
students
 might
found
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find
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 their talent when
study
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studying
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 sub-
subjects
 and that will be
their
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a
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 memorable experience. These
subjects
 may not
useful
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use
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 at the present but maybe in the future they will be able to use
it
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them
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,
for example
 when your shirt is broken, you will know how to fix it because you had studied dressmaking before.
On the other hand
,
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although
though
athough
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although
 sub-
subjects
is
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are
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 helpful and fun,
but
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apply
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students
 should spend
limit
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limited
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 time with them to have more time for academic
subjects
. Learning math, history, philosophy and
others
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other
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 main
subjects
 can
training
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train
be training
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student's
students
studens’
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students’
mind
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minds
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 and they will have a good foundation to hunt
a
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apply
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good scores
from
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on
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 every exam.
As a result
, they can have more achievement to decorate their CV for a better future. With all the knowledge
students
 collect from their education path, they will have
a extensive knowledge
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extensive knowledge
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 and
wide
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a wide
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 vision of the world to
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develop
develope
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develop
 themselves.
For instance
,
study
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studying
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 a lots help us improve ourselves and closer to success. To summarize, not only
students
 should learn sub-
subjects
 in school if they
be
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are
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 able to, but
also
 they should spend more time
for
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on
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 the main
subjects
 to pass exams.
However
, they should balance
study
 between crucial and less important
subjects
.
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