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Some people prefer to eat meals at restaurants while others like to prepare and eat food in their own home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

Food
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 is one of the most crucial needs of a human being. Some people choose to go out and eat in a restaurant
,
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in contrast
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, others would prefer to prepare and consume their
food
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 at
their
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apply
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home
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. Personally, I prefer homemade recipes for the fact that they are healthier, more delicious and less expensive than those eaten in
restaurants
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. Homemade
food
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 is far healthier than ready
food
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 for many reasons.
First,
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while
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 cooking at
home
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,
who
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those who
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wants
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want
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 to cook for
the
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their
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 family members
,
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apply
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chooses
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choose
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 all the ingredients with a lot of care
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;
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 they must be fresh and of good quality.
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, the ingredients and the utensils used are clean.
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, in most
restaurants
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,
and
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apply
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because of the
big
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large
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 quantity of prepared
food
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, they cannot
take
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always take
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 care of all the materials and the utensils to be
always
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apply
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cleaned. And,
for example
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, in
restaurants
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, the oil used in the fryers is used many times
so
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, so
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 that it becomes unhealthy and sometimes toxic,
while
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 at
home
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, the oil is changed frequently. All these differences affect the
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food
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food's
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 taste and
consequently
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, homemade
food
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 is more delicious.
Besides
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this
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, cooking at
home
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 is less expensive than buying ready-made
food
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 or eating in
restaurants
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. For the same price, a bigger quantity of
food
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 is prepared at
home
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. Especially for big families, they can prepare
food
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 for all family members at
the
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half the
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 cost of only half the quantity in
the
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a
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 restaurant
.
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meal.
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 In
restaurants
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, you have to pay not only the price of
food
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 but
also
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 the cost of sitting in the place and the service you are receiving.
That is
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 why you must pay much more in the restaurant than
in
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at
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your
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apply
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home
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 in order to eat the same plate.
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, it is unaffordable to always eat in
restaurants
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. In conclusion, in spite of the desire
of eating
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to eat
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 in
restaurants
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 on some occasions,
such
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 as birthdays, I usually prefer homemade
food
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 for the fact that it is healthier and more affordable. I advise everyone to try cooking at
home
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. It is a great pleasure for me.

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structure
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grammar
Use simple and clear words. Check for small grammar slips.
content
Mention a tiny opposing view or a short contrast to show balance, then rest with your view.
coherence
Link ideas with easy-well transitions like 'also', 'then', 'but'.
lexical
Check spell and keep words simple.
content
Clear stance and easy conclusion.
structure
Reason for home food shows in two parts (health and cost).
support
Examples help support points (oil in fryers, cost in restaurant).
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