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Technology is being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Technology
 has evolved many parts of our lives, that includes in the field of education. Computers are frequently used as a tool to teach. While electronics can be a useful item to enhance learning in classes,
it
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 can
also
 cause distractions.
This
 essay will describe the benefits and downfalls of
technology
 in education. Electronics can cause a hazardous environment for learners to focus. In lectures,
students
 take notes on their
computer
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computers
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 or use their
smart phone
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 to
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 class materials. These can be an easy distraction.
For example
, most
students
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 computers are linked to
facebook
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. Facebook has endless feeds with interesting articles to read that can easily disrupt for
students
 to pay attention in school.
Technology
 provides a method for
students
 to carry numerous documents at once. In university, scholars require lots of materials in lessons. Not only do they use books, but most lectures are presented on power points. All of these can be changed into a file format that can be easily transported by a device.
For example
, an
ipad
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iPad
 is one
of
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the useful
items
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 for
students
. It is convenient for
students
 to have an
ipad
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iPad
,
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 because it saves all the files needed. It is
a
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portable
,
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 because
in
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 one device all the files can be accessed. In conclusion,
technology
 can be helpful to carry abundant
of
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materials.
However
, it
also
 decreases the level of focus in an educational environment and
prevent
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students
 from learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia resources
  • online collaboration
  • virtual classrooms
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • learning management systems
  • adaptive learning
  • screen time
  • tech-savvy
  • cyberbullying
  • digital equity
  • edtech (educational technology)
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