Some countries allow old people to work at any age that they want. Do the advantage outweight the disadvantage ?

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The retired working force is the real gem for any country
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some countries didn't set up upper age limit for retirement. I believe demerits outweigh merit.My subsequent crumb of writing will elucidate my viewpoints with relevant examples. To start with, in today's fast-moving world, the organisation has more expectation from the
workforce
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to achieve common goals where uninterrupted work, high focus and concentration is required.To achieve all these,young energetic blood is required and an old experienced
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can't handle
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pressurized situations.
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in
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a competitive environment,
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should be familiar with the new technologies and learn them quickly whenever required,
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,after a certain age people lose the tendency to learn and grasp new things, due to which the
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workforce
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remains behind all time.
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, in my organisation, a group of aged
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were handling the legacy system and when it replaces legacy systems with the latest technology it was hard for them to learn and work. There are certain areas where old
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have the upper hand over the young energetic
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.In some industries, experience played a crucial role like handling account books, and managing the volatile
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in the garment industries.With their experience and immense
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they can teach new
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so that they turn them productive quickly in a short span of time. To conclude, in my opinion, in certain areas aged
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played a crucial role where they are sharing their experience with others to achieve common goals quickly,
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,
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experiences faded out if work is replaced with a new workflow or with new technologies.
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