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Some countries allow old people to work at any age that they want. Do the advantage outweight the disadvantage ?

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The retired working force is the real gem for any country
therefore
 some countries didn't set up upper age limit for retirement. I believe demerits outweigh merit.My subsequent crumb of writing will elucidate my viewpoints with relevant examples. To start with, in today's fast-moving world, the organisation has more expectation from the
workforce
 to achieve common goals where uninterrupted work, high focus and concentration is required.To achieve all these,young energetic blood is required and an old experienced
workforce
 can't handle
such
 pressurized situations.
Also
 in
such
 a competitive environment,
employees
 should be familiar with the new technologies and learn them quickly whenever required,
moreover
,after a certain age people lose the tendency to learn and grasp new things, due to which the
aged
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ageing
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workforce
 remains behind all time.
For example
, in my organisation, a group of aged
employees
 were handling the legacy system and when it replaces legacy systems with the latest technology it was hard for them to learn and work. There are certain areas where old
employees
 have the upper hand over the young energetic
workforce
.In some industries, experience played a crucial role like handling account books, and managing the volatile
workforce
 in the garment industries.With their experience and immense
knowledge
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,knowledge
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 they can teach new
employees
 so that they turn them productive quickly in a short span of time. To conclude, in my opinion, in certain areas aged
workforce
 played a crucial role where they are sharing their experience with others to achieve common goals quickly,
however
,
such
 experiences faded out if work is replaced with a new workflow or with new technologies.
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