Traditional medicines, such as herbal remedies and acupuncture, are very popular in some countries. Those who practice traditional medicines claim that it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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The pie chart
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the proportion of six different energies produced from resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Overall, it is clear from the charts that
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oil
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produced from resources in a country, while other renewable produced the least in both years. According to the pie chart in 1985, the highest proportion of the energies production was occupied by oil at 52%.
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is followed by nuclear at 22 % and natural gas at 13 %. In comparison, coal energy was produced at 8 % and hydro at 4% and the least energy produced is
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renewable at 1%.
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39 % and 8 %, respectively. On the
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production of coal and natural gas
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significantly
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increased at 22 % and 23 % in 2003.
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slightly increased to 4 and Hydro energy
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at 4 %.
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