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Some people prefer to work for a large company, while others prefer to work in a small office. Which size of company do you prefer to work in?

Some people love working for a large
company
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, while others select to
work
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 in a small office. Personally, I choose to
work
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 for a large
company
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. When working for a large
company
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 you can have more connections, more
experience
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, and
benefit
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benefits
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.
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 of all, the bigger the
company
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 is
,
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 the more employees that have the chance for you to connect with others which can help you when you have difficulty in the job.
Beside
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 that, you can have a chance to learn from others, which may be useful for later
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 as when/ in case you start up a
company
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 or a project.
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, when you
work
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 for a large
company
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, you may have to face many difficult situations. Solving them makes you gain more valuable
experience
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.
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, when you
work
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 for large offices, you may be taken on two projects at the same time. At that time, you can learn more
experience
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 quickly and use it to complete the project on time. The
third
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 reason why I choose to
work
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 in large companies is because of
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benefits
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. In most large companies, the
benefits
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 which include travel, health check or insurance every year are attractive. Especially, some companies will provide a house and part of the expense of your bill every month. It can help me save money and decrease the amount of money
which
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apply
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I spend on paying a bill. To sum up, working for a big
company
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 has many
benefits
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 like connection,
experience
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 and especially
benefits
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.
Therefore
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, I think I will choose to
work
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 for a big
company
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.

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