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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods, which has a negative effect on local food culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The effectiveness of eating fast
foods
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 is debatable. Some
people
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 believe that foreign
foods
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 dominate the native traditional
foods
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 which provides a negative impact on local
food
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 culture. I strongly believe the statement and
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 and foremost, diverse countries like India have a variety of cultures and
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 different
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 traditions. Fast
foods
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 are not having enough nutrient content as it is in the local
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 but
people
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 prefer to eat them. Chinese
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 as noodles, and pasta are now widely popular among Indians, particularly children who love to eat those foreign
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.
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, children were affected by intestinal diseases because of the regular consumption of fast
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, to overcome
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 issue doctors suggest adding more vegetables to their diet which will cure the diseases. Nowadays, hotels and restaurants advertise fast
food
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 and attract customers to earn huge profits.
People
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 unknowingly consume fast
foods
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 on a regular basis and fall sick. In metro cities, the dominance of fast
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 is very high when compared to the countryside. A recent survey made by a Non-Governmental Organisation shows that
people
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 nowadays eat more fast
foods
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 in the cities and many children didn't have adequate knowledge about traditional
foods
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. In conclusion, the young generation is now forgetting the benefits of local
foods
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 because of the increase in the popularity of foreign
foods
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.I strongly
agree
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