Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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through which a student can
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focus
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and pay
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the teacher teaching in
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, it can be said that the education systems should look upon the problems of
students
which they are facing and due to which they are not able to pay
attention
in the
schools
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  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
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