Freshwater has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of this increased demand, and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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the lack of freshwater
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becomes
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a global problem and there is an ongoing discussion about the
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responsibilities
responsabilities
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responsibilities
of
society
and people as individuals.
First
and foremost, it is reasonable to assume that the main cause of
this
issue is our lifestyle. Both as
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individuals
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society
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we
use
a huge amount of
water
for everyday needs even when it is not really necessary just
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because
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because
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water
is something easy to find.
For instance
, let's think about the fast
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of clothes we
use
to buy nowadays,
this
habit leads us
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them
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with an
unbelieveble
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unbelievable
waste of
water
. We can improve measures on different levels to solve
this
problem. As
governments
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we can try to
use
the
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school's
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education to train
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future citizen of our
society
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importance of
this
resource and the best ways to save
the
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water
.
Also
as
individuals
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we are able to have a positive impact on the
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situation
sitation
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.
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we must reduce the time we spend
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number of weekly washes,
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use
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some
water
. After considerating all the points made above, we can assume that
this
limited resource becomes an
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urgent
agent
ugent
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urgent
problem these days. We all have the
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responsibility
responsability
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for
the
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future generations
of
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solve
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this
issue, as individuals and as members of
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society
we have a role to play in order to decrease
this
emergency.
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