In spite of the advantages made in agruculture,many people around the world still go hungry.Why id thid the case? what can be done about this problem?

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beginning
of the world
agriculture
has been playing a significant role in providing food around the globe despite the advancement in
this
particular sector ,still, people suffering from
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hunger at the international level and it seems that it will
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occur
occuer
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occur
in the future in high percentages.
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of
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scenario ,
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in spite
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of how much the world
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moved from traditional techniques to well-developed modern ways in many areas , there are too
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people have lack
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basic food. One of the main
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behind
this
is the attitude of a huge number of counties.
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ıf we have a look at these countries’
priorty
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priority
aim we could clearly see that
industirialization
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industrialization
industrialisation
is more important than
agriculture
so that much money is being used for the innovations of industry
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agriculture
.Because of
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situation
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situaiton
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most of the
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vegetables
vegatables
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vegetables
could be produced in
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strict
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areas as the production still
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on the weather or climate.
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of
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preference existing foods are limited and not
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available
avaible
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available
for
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everyone in the world.
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Secondly
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,
undevelop
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undeveloped
countries have not reached the logical knowledge of farming yet. They are not able to prevent their farmland from the destruction
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the
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insects or drought.
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there are some movements in order to escape from them but without technology or improvements which could be provided
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the help of other
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countries. According to
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research ,after holding
seminers
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seminars
and training
farmes
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farmers
farms
frames
and the other people who work in
agriculture
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sector by
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international organization company , great improvements recorded.Organizations
such
as WHO should hold companies like the mentioned one for reforming their perspective
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agriculture
. In conclusion ,it is essential to produce
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solutions
solituons
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solutions
in order to
obstruck
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obstruct
the food problem which occurs
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all over and every
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country
coountry
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country
and organization should carry the ball.
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