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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right or wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #teachers #students #judge #right #subjects
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Teacher
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Teachers
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 and
educator
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educators
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 have
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difficult
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 to do as they are supposed to teach
kids
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 values and
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 academic topics.
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 essay will discuss these two points of
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 and
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besides
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 it will provide my personal opinion. I would like to start off by saying that
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,
schools
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 are a place where
kids
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 are able to learn
principals
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 and academic subjects
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 to educational subjects. Even though,
teacher
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teachers
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 are not the only responsible
of
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 teaching
kids
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 how to behave well in public or
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in different
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 places as
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 might come from the household.
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, when I was a kid, my mom taught me how to eat properly and how to greet people when entering
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a new place, whereas my teacher was
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 teaching me to say “good morning” which is
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 part of what my mom imposed to me as a toddler.
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, teachers are not always responsible to educate children about manners and good behaviours. In fact, part of the education is coming from the house and the other part from
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.
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, when the teachers see
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bad behaviour they will inform the parents respectively, and they will correct the kid
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accordingly
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 so that
kids
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 will not suffer from rejection or bad habits when they are adults.
Schools
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 should be equipped with
psychologist
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psychologists
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 and trained
personal
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 to provide conferences to parents and
kids
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 when
they
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 behaviour is escalating to another level. In conclusion, in today’s
civilization
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,civilization
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 we need to provide good education and manners to our
kids
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 along with the
schools
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,
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 does not mean that the entire responsibility would be only for the school but the household as well.
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