Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?
It is not uncommon that after serving some time in prison for some
people
it does not take too
long time before they commit another crime. The problem roots in various inefficiencies of punitive systems which should be discussed and addressed Add an article
a too
one-by-one
.
Prisons do not influence Correct your spelling
one by one
people
positively, despite it being one of the
main objectives of them. While time behind bars does indeed punish criminals, it does not create any incentives for them to become better Change the word
their
people
. When a prisoner is finally
set free, not only is he the same person
as before,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
in many cases
he has nowhere to go. Both factors make repeating crimes likely, resulting in Add a comma
,cases
both
more Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
who suffer from the actions of this
person
and the taxpayer money which again have
to be spent on his stay in prison.
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
The modern
society should give criminals more chances and try introducing changes to punitive systems. Over the course of his term in the prison, a convicted Correct article usage
Modern
person
could be given various jobs that would enable his transformation into a better human who is no longer interested in stealing or harming others. This
, for instance
, could be gardenkeeping
. Once Correct your spelling
garden keeping
this
person
is out, it is necessary for responsible officials to know about his next
steps and to be able to influence them. The latter will sometimes require some money investment, for instance
for paying the rent in a place where this
ex-prisoner would live while he adapts for
his renowned life. Change preposition
to
Such
programs have already proven successful in many western countries where the percentage of criminals who get convicted again is steadily falling.
In conclusion, while it is true that prisons are inefficient in preventing repeating crimes, there are good approaches to making them work better. In the future prisons will be transforming into re-educational centres with focus
on correcting behaviour, rather than on punishment.Add an article
a focus
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