Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly.

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The doctors

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over- aged citizens do

The doctors Suggest that over- aged citizens do

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exercise

daily but some patient have not

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exercises

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exercise

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routine

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to discuss the benefits as well as causes of

workout

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young age

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routine because they know that health is wealth. If you do physical jerks you, do not need doctors. Beautiful keep your

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body fit and fine and it

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your mental skills, more attention

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whole

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day. The main thing is that

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older

people

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exercise

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age, so most probably

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of heart attack and liver disease and liver diseases. They should make a timetable and must follow it.

on the other hand

, many humans do not follow the daily routine due to

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in their

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. workout is very important in our

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. many

people

know that

exercise

is good for fitness.

although

they cannot have sufficient time for

morning

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walk and they are trapping of health problems

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proper growth of body and mental problems.

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a survey found that only 40% of

people

exercise

and have fit and

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persons are suffered from many diseases. our government should encourage

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human beings by organising special events

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every weekend in every city. Yoga

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best

exercise

for our health.

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people

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exercise

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people say that shops should sell food products that are made in the local area whenever possible rather than foods that are imported from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. WHy is this?Do you think it is positive or negative development?

Some people believe that sports are an essential part of school life for children while you should give reasons for your answers and include. ideas and examples

The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?