Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly.

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over- aged citizens do

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exercise

daily but some patient have not

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exercises

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routine

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to discuss the benefits as well as causes of

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routine because they know that health is wealth. If you do physical jerks you, do not need doctors. Beautiful keep your

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body fit and fine and it

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your mental skills, more attention

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whole

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older

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exercise

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of heart attack and liver disease and liver diseases. They should make a timetable and must follow it.

on the other hand

, many humans do not follow the daily routine due to

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in their

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. workout is very important in our

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. many

people

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exercise

is good for fitness.

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morning

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walk and they are trapping of health problems

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proper growth of body and mental problems.

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a survey found that only 40% of

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persons are suffered from many diseases. our government should encourage

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human beings by organising special events

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every weekend in every city. Yoga

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best

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people

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Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly.

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In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people say that web contents should be used to instruct children. Others think that it is not helpful in an educational setting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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