Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Universities should accept equal
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couple
of
man
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men
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and
woman
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students in each subject or
field
.
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couple
of
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in
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agreement and disagreement will be explored in
this
essay. I am of the opinion that acceptance in colleges should
based
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on
do
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merit not giving equal opportunities
for
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everyone. By way of illustration
a
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some
of
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individuals
to be
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interested in
engineering
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field
whereas a
couple
of nursing
field
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but
this
limitation caused that individual doesn’t go to their aim and eventually,they
field
their abandoned and lose their motivation
this
hardship impressive in job prospects so impose every subject on the person hasn’t interested in a fundamental flaw. It is asserted that
instead
of gender discrimination universities should students and applicants
with
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pay attention to interest accepting because has
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women
woman
womans
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that
applicant
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police and public safety or even fire diplomats
field
.
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addition
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a
couple
of
man
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has that
to
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cooking is interested and should each enter into the desired
field
based on competence. In conclusion, I express the idea that
this
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equal opportunities not only benefit but adverse ,the best way is choice based on worthy that
lead
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to pursue education,founding suitable job in upcoming,the person doesn’t have to study about something that one is not interested in.
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  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
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