Rich countries often give money to poorer countries,but it does not solve poverty. Therfore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of whether the rich
governments
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support
by materialism to developing cities has remained to be controversial. Divergent as people's
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, I totally agree that giving
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technical
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support
to developing cities
instead
of
money
is more efficiently either protecting the relationship between or practical progress for them. Of all the
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why
governments
should provide
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technical
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to developing
countries
rather than
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support
, none are as significant as the fact that
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money
are received by tax from the citizens.
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, they might look forward to developing their home town or
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for occur around them. On the
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, if the rich
governments
use technical
support
to practically enrich these developing counties in technology progress or education for valuable skills,
such
as how to build up an army team. It is more
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than
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money
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them experience more fault in
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. Another reason for our concern is that funding is not a major problem in some developing
countries
. With
this
in mind, the problem in more developing
countries
is
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children, either because of
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of professionals
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to go to. Without professionals, a city cannot develop their own city smoothly.
However
, If the rich
governments
offer them some specialization to them, it must be a leap in their progress. Judging from these, it is patently obvious that supporting the developing
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giving them
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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