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Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with?

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There is a saying that
schools
 need to be more entertaining, and others think that their only purpose is to educate. I partly agree that
schools
 need to be more entertaining, and
this
 essay will explain why. People used to think that
students
 only need study at
school
.
However
, they ignore the educational effects of
entertainment
 which comes from
school
. When
students
 have
entertainment
 in
school
, they are not only for fun but
also
 learning a range of skills.
For instance
, the teacher will organise a game and assign
students
 to a team, which is an efficient way to teach teamwork to
students
.
Also
, some recreational activities in
schools
 can stimulate
students
' creativity. There are some
schools
 in China; that will organise a create snowman activities in winter. When
students
 attend
this
 activity, they will use their brains to imagine what kind of snowman are they going to build. In
this
 process,
students
 reduce stress and improve their creativity.
On the other hand
, excessive
entertainment
 in
school
 can
also
 cause problems. If there is too much
entertainment
 in
school
;
students
 would like to associate
school
 with play. Namely, they will pay more attention on play
instead
 of studying in
school
.
Therefore
, it will have some negative effects on their academic performance.
Moreover
, many
students
 get together to play games, which may lead to danger. Because it is difficult to manage a great number of
students
, and sometimes it will cause stampede accidents. To sum up, I partly agree that
schools
 need to do more entertaining. Despite excessive
entertainment
 having some disadvantages,
schools
 can implement some regulations and protective measures, and limit the time of
entertainment
.
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