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many people work long hours , leaving very little time for leisure activities. what are the advantages and disadvantages

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If you want to be the best in your workplace, have a job promotion or be a reputable employee, you must work hard to achieve these goals; but without rest and recreation,
this
 hard endeavour leads to serious illnesses. The following essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 issue. One of many people s main concerns is their financial requirements. They spend more
hours
 at an office to make enough money in order to have a better and more convenient life. Sometimes, their jobs position required them to spend more time on work and with the expansion of the Internet and social networks employees are available 24/7. Not only
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 more advantages for employers, fulfilling their company s obligations on time, but
also
 staff can improve their positions.
On the other hand
, the negative effects of sacrificing leisure moments are numerous. Some of these effects include loss of energy, insomnia, anxiety, weakness of the immune system and weight loss.
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instance, at the end of shift work and despite being tired, you cannot sleep because the brain is processing the day s information and it causes
loss
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 of concentration and so,
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 s mood will change. As working
hours
 increase, some meals may be omitted
therefore
, it affects body weight. All these events are due to the inability to balance performance and social life. The human body needs rest to refresh itself. If you do not pay attention to
this
 demand, you will enter a vicious cycle and your efficiency will decrease. In summary, working extra
hours
 and leaving a
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hours
 for leisure has its pros and cons. rest time is one of the basic needs of the human body and people must maintain a proper work-life balance in life.
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