Define the term “globalization” and explain the pros and cons of the effects of globalization. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Before the 20th century,
people
were usually living in restricted areas.
Then
, transportation and communication became popular with technological developments and the interaction between
people
increased significantly.
Globalization
means the increasing integration of all the countries without restrictions on their boundaries.
Globalization
has both benefits and drawbacks. The main advantage of
globalization
comes from the idea of preventing conflicts between countries and
people
. Most industries and sectors change depending on the inside or outside of the country. If the main language
would be
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the same all over the world, there would be no language conflicts between the
people
who were born anywhere.
For instance
,
although
some racist
people
will always exist in the world,
globalization
maybe can
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decrease the number of racist
people
because most
people
will feel similar emotions and ideas in the long term
such
as in the USA.
Globalization
brings
such
an enormous drawback which can be called monotonous.
People
are getting resembling
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each other both
physical
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and
psychological
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. At
the
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first glance, it
maybe does
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not look like a disadvantage
however
it takes away the uniqueness of
people
which indicates your identity.
For example
, the number of aesthetic operations is climbing enormously. Even though
people
feel better themselves by having aesthetic surgeries, they will have similar physical appearances after the surgeries.
In addition
to physical impacts,
globalization
also
is a threat to the variety of different languages. It aims to have a common language to communicate so that the local languages will be eliminated one by one.
To conclude
,
globalization
has both positive and negative effects on countries and among the
people
.
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