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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. But the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative form of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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he
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first
car
 appeared on
British
roads
 in 1888. But
the
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 year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on
British
roads
 ,
therefore
 it is considered by some
people
 that alternative
form
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forms
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 of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to
control
car
 ownership and
use
. İ
t
is completely agree
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 with the opinion . Many troubles
such
 as
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an accident
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accident
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accidents
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 or
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waiting
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wait
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forwait
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 traffic on
british
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roads
 can be eliminated if
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an
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alternative
form
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forms
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 of transport should be encouraged and international laws
introduced
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are introduced
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 to
control
car
 ownership and
use
.
Firstly
 ,
cars
 are so popular in the world .
Furthermore
 ,
people
 generally prefer
cars
 for travel or
job
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a job
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 , and
thus
 many troubles reveal on
british
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British
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roads
 , the most popular road
, .
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,
.
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Accidents
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continuously
continuosly
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continuously
 take place
in
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on
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 these
roads
 , and
also
 governments don'
t
 provide
control
 for
car
owners
 . İn
additional
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, these
accidents
 cause
to
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too
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 many
deathes
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deaths
.
For instance
 , according to
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a
the
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made survey about
this
 topic , many women
driver
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drivers
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 passed many
accident
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accidents
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 in
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2020 year due to
government's
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government
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 didn'
t
 provide
control
 for
car
owners
.
Secondly
 , another point to consider is that many
accident
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accidents
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 can be eliminated if governments will provide
control
 for
car
owners
 , and
thus
 many women driver can
use
 their
cars
 in a
comforted
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 way.
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 , ı passed an
accident
 for didn'
t
 be
control
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controlled
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in
2021
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 year , afterwards
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ı was removed to hospital .
Moreover
 , ı saw many
people
 who live
same
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the same
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accidents
. The consequences of
accident
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accidents
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affected badly for human life . İn conclusion , many
accidents
 take place
in
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british
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roads
 due to don'
t
be
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being
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control
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controlled
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for
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by
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car
owners
 .
Therefore
 many
people
 affect
such
 as
pass
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passing
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 an
accident
 badly .
Consequently
 , many
people
 can
use
 their
cars
 in the best way if
the
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apply
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control
 can be provided for
car
owners
 by governments .
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