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What forms do they take? Do you agree the problems of mobile phones outweigh the benefits?

Currently, with the invention of the
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 phone, technology made great progress. it is undeniable that mobile
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 have some merits and demerits. I believed that the benefits of
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 phone excel their drawbacks. On the one hand, the advantages of gadgets are far greater. To commence with, since the beginning of the 20th century, mobile
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 saw an increase in numbers. Nowadays, it occupies a great deal of
people
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's time because ,by means of technology, they can make communication with their friends regardless of distance. Along with ,that a
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 phone enables
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 to access a virtual world with the help of the internet. It substitutes the role of the newspaper because by using
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-phone
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 can acquire countless information on social media or sites like BBC and GUARDIAN. One explanation for
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, according to recent research, as well as mobile
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 gaining popularity, newspapers
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 are on the verge of disappearing.
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, the disadvantages of
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phones
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 are fewer.
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, sometimes
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 exceed in using gadgets, so it leads to serious accidents. To exemplify
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, according to scientists some
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 are obsessed with mobile
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, even when they pass the road, they read or write messages. Scholars state that
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 have the ability to see at a 270-degree angle.,
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, when they write messages they lose
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 vision. Actually,
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 is the reason for a car accident.
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, using extreme
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phones
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 creates mental illness in
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 like depression and anxiety which is why
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 become introverted in subsequent life, they avoid interacting with anyone. As a ,result it affects their both work and social life negatively. To conclude,
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 mobile
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 have a few drawbacks. I believe that the advantages surpass its disadvantages if it is used in a limited time

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