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some people believe that is best to accept a bad situation, such as any unsatisfactory job or shortagw of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. disscuss both these views and give yor own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, whilst reckon that you need to accept any situation that happened in your
life
such
 as a bad job, the opponent view that individuals need to try to fix and improve their
life
.
However
, I agree with the former view because sitting and doing nothing will not change anything in our future. My contention will be
further
 explained. On the one hand, some people do not have the power to change anything and
this
 leads them to accept anything that happened in
life
.
This
 means that they do not have any fears of the future, and they prefer to live every day with a full heart without taking care of anything.
For instance
, if an employee accepts his job without loving it because he takes a suitable salary, he will live a comfortable
life
.
Thus
, what can be said is that some individuals want to live a normal
life
 without any challenges and problems.
On the other hand
, advocates of working hard prefer to take every challenge in
life
 and refuse to accept any uncomfortable situation.
In other words
, individuals living their
life
 with a brave heart and big wishes will make them great people and they will achieve everything in
life
.
For example
, if parents work hard and do extra jobs, they will bring their children a happy and comfortable
life
.
Hence
, trying to change any bad situation is a blessing because at least you are trying to achieve something and
this
 is better than sitting doing nothing. In conclusion, after
this
 essay has manifested the point above, it can be reiterated that growth is full of challenges and people need to accept that and try to work harder to reach everything they want.
Therefore
, I am convinced that trying does not make a person lose anything, but it helps him live a better
life
.
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