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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Technology
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 has formed and changed various aspects of how
people
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 interact.
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 it affected how
people
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 bond with each other. Due to the fact that it broadened the range of communication and allowed different methods of interaction. I believe
technology
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,
such
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 as the
internet
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, positively changed
people
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's lives.
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internet
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 has developed ways
people
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 bond and
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 positive aspect of it.
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 of all, with the
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internet
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 anyone can easily communicate with
people
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 all over the world.
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 includes
people
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 they have never met or
people
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 that are at a distance. Nowadays, with platforms
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 as Facebook and Instagram,
people
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 can contact numerous
people
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 who are not living in their own country. It permits
people
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 to engage in conversations of their interest, by commenting or reacting to pictures they like,
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random users.
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, the method
people
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 interact has changed and allowed
people
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 to be more social.
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 is because, now, social media, various applications, and websites enable them to use emojis, make a call through the camera, or even send pictures.
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 means even without having to meet anyone face-to-face,
people
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 can now have similar conversations
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 their homes.
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, the website/program Zoom
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 is
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 easily accessible portal where workers could conduct meetings. In my opinion,
technology
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 solved a crisis a few years back, which entails that it is positively changing the world. During the pandemic caused by the
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,
people
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 were forbidden to meet
people
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 outside of their homes. Most of the workers worked from their computers at home and
students
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 classes became online.
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, electrical devices
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 as the computer, and the
internet
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 was
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necessary tool. Without
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technology
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 it would have been impossible to continue our lives. To conclude, even though human interaction has decreased, there are many benefits to
technology
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. It enabled
people
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 all over the world to communicate and increased ways to interact with them.
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, from my personal experience
technology
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 is definitely a promising source.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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