Some people say the main enviroinmental problem is the loss of particular specious of plants and animal on the other hand others say including me there are more important enviroinmental problems.

We live in an age when human beings have to face many
problems
including being
proudced
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produced
by themselves
such
as environmental
problems
.Not only
the
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our nature but
also
many
animals
are affected by
the
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environmental
problems
.Some
people
say the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and
animals
on the other hand
others say including me there are more important environmental
problems
.
Firstly
,
people
have been holding companies in order to take attention to endangered species both
animals
and plants.It is obviously an important issue which should be considered.
On the other hand
,there are other areas which are affected by the existing environmental
problems
and if we don’t make protection against
to
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it more and more species would be in danger
as a result
of them
such
climate
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, global warming, melting
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.
Secondly
, many
people
suffer from the lack of food in spite of the developing technology innovations in agriculture and industry because of the changing air conditions
people
who live in poor areas couldn’t make an efficient estimate of the weather and have to deal with the effects.In my opinion, the movements in order to solve
this
problem should be taken the
first
place.
In addition
to that , there are more
problems
waiting for the
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protecting
protections
protectings
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protection
such
air
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pollution as it causes many health problem
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by day.According to the
last
research, in the
future
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a huge amount of the population
such
60
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% will suffer from breathing
problems
even
the
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newborns. In conclusion, we all know that we are not alone in the world as
animals
and plants are significant parts of it just like us in but the results of the
environmental
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doesn't
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impact on only them and everybody should be
awaire
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aware
of it.
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