You recently organised an all day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: * Say what the participant liked about the hotel. * Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. * Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in futures.

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Dear Sir, I, Kuljeet Kaur, an employee of XYZ company organized an all-day meeting on the 24th of August in the hotel. I am writing to you to bring into your eyes the feedback shared by the participants.
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, each one is very happy with the amenities provided in the restaurant, especially, the meal served. Apart from it, they
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like the interior decoration of the auditorium.
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, many of them
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praise the efforts of the staff.
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, one thing that they complained about is the quantity of food.
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, a few employees
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write that they were served uncooked rice.
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, due to the above-mentioned problem, they were unhappy about the food.
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, it would be really commendable if you could please take care of these problems in order to serve the customers in a better way. I
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suggest you reduce the size of the buffet so that food is not wasted. Hope you will pay attention to it. Yours Faithfully, Kuljeet Kaur.
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