You have an appointment with your manager the next day. Write him/her a letter about what you’re going to discuss at the meeting. In your meeting, you should tell: What did you do for the company during the years you worked there What changes you would like to recommend What training you require

Dear Mr Singh, I am writing today with
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to my scheduled meeting tomorrow with you
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the conference room.
Although
the schedule is for business development, here I want to discuss several other issues as well which I will be discussing tomorrow. Since it had been approximately 7 years of my service with
this
organisation, I feel overwhelmed
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the wonderful opportunity that I had received in
this
firm. As
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a finance manager I took the finance and accounts department to
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phenomenal heights as the profit of the company at the time of my joining was just $250 million
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, it had
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increased to $570 million till
last
year. Though it was
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teamwork, being in charge of the said department, I feel honoured about it. Well, I would like to suggest some alterations in the finance department. Particularly, the computers are becoming obsolete as they are approximately 10 years old,
besides
this
, the windows in all these devices are outdated and as per engineers
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these devices need a replacement. So I recommend the replacement of these gadgets for the benefit of the whole organization.
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, since I have been working for the
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training in the Management field. As I
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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