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Dear Mr Singh, I am writing today with

regards

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to my scheduled meeting tomorrow with you

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the conference room.

Although

the schedule is for business development, here I want to discuss several other issues as well which I will be discussing tomorrow. Since it had been approximately 7 years of my service with

this

organisation, I feel overwhelmed

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the wonderful opportunity that I had received in

this

firm. As

being

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a finance manager I took the finance and accounts department to

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phenomenal heights as the profit of the company at the time of my joining was just $250 million

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, it had

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increased to $570 million till

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teamwork, being in charge of the said department, I feel honoured about it. Well, I would like to suggest some alterations in the finance department. Particularly, the computers are becoming obsolete as they are approximately 10 years old,

besides

this

, the windows in all these devices are outdated and as per engineers

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these devices need a replacement. So I recommend the replacement of these gadgets for the benefit of the whole organization.

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training in the Management field. As I

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

216 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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People, who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent to do you agree or disagree?

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