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The bar charts provide information about the proportion of the population in and outside
Australia
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 and their area of residence. The data compares the figures in the years 1995 and 2010. Overall, it can be noted that an increasing pattern was seen in
people
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 born in and outside of
Australia
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 that reside in
cities
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 in the given time period.
In contrast
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, a decreasing percentage of
people
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 living in rural
areas
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 and
towns
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 was documented. In detail, in 1995, residents of
Australia
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 living in the
cities
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 were approximately 50% and
people
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 living in rural
areas
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 and
towns
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 were approximately 30% and 20%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, those individuals living outside
Australia
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 that reside in
cities
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,
towns
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, and rural
areas
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 were about 10% higher than
that
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that person
those people
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people
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 living in
Australia
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. Fifteen years later, a different trend can be observed. While a considerable increase was reported for residents living both in and outside
Australia
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, the residents in
towns
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 and rural
areas
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 decline considerably.
People
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 in
Australia
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 living in
cities
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 were at around 65% and about 18% for both
towns
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 and rural
areas
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. Those born outside and living in
cities
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 accounted for 80% while those living in
towns
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 were for nearly 10%.
However
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, those living in rural
areas
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 declined significantly to 5%.
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