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In some countries, some of the criminal cases in the low courts are shown on the television, so that the general public can watch them. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some countries, criminal cases in the law courts are shown on television so that the public can watch them.
Although
this
 may raise the public's awareness of criminals, the disadvantages exist
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that they are violating the human rights of the offenders. In
this
 essay, I will prove that in
this
case
, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. On the one hand, the advantage of showing judgment of conviction on television to the community is that
this
 will raise the public's awareness of criminals.
For example
, if it's about an individual being kidnapped, people will be aware of their own safety.
Furthermore
, as the
case
 was watched by the public, it will receive questions from the public.
Thus
, the
case
 will be scrutinized carefully.
For example
, a
case
 of stolen goods was broadcast on TV and received questions which make the judges consider more about the problems and
thus
, the
case
 will be more transparent.
On the other hand
, showing cases on TV may violate the human rights of the
offender
. The privacy of the
offender
 should be respected, without considering what crime he committed.
For instance
, in a law court, the media should ask the
offender
 whether he prefers filming the
case
 or not.
This
 will guarantee
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privacy of the
offender
. In conclusion, even though broadcasting cases on TV will raise awareness, the disadvantages are that
this
 may violate the rights of criminals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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