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In some cultures, older people are valued most highly. In other cultures, youth is valued more than experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion as to which age should be most valued.

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It is hard to deny the key role of experience in our lives and because of that, some
people
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 argue that elderlies should be valued the most; while others tend to think the other way around. Senior citizens in every
country
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 are considered valuable for different reasons.
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, they carry the cultural and historical backgrounds of the
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 with them and, they will eventually pass them on to the
next
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 generation.
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, they have faced many challenging situations and managed to handle them so young
people
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 should learn from them. They have worked in
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 for many years and helped to build up the
country
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 everyone owes them so much. The
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 reason is mostly related to the cultural and moral values of
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. Old
people
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 are more experienced and have seen the ups and downs of life
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, the social conventions obligate other
people
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 especially youngsters, to respect them more.
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, young
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 make up a considerable part of
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. I agree with those who argue that young
people
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 should be valued more; because they are the working arms of the
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 and the future depends on them. They have dreams and passions
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, they are more determined and well- motivated
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,
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 makes them more compatible with the difficulties of working.
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, young
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 have more energy and can learn faster.
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, they are usually more familiar with today’s technology
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 they can work efficiently. In conclusion, both views of
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 argument have their merits. On balance ,
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, I think young
people
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 need to be valued more in order for
society
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 to improve and become a better place.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • historical context
  • traditional knowledge
  • custodians of culture
  • societal values
  • historical narratives
  • contributions to society
  • long-term perspective
  • energy
  • innovation
  • adaptable
  • driving societal change
  • embracing new ideas
  • economic factors
  • thriving economy
  • productivity
  • physical vitality
  • investing
  • continuous progress
  • advancement
  • social reform
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