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An increasing number of 18-year-olds are moving out of their parents' homes so they can live on their own after finishing high school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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An increasing number of 18-year-olds are moving out to live on their own after finishing high school. In
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. On the one hand, the advantages of
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, the high-school
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 will be more independent about their financial statement. As they live alone, they will have to always keep track of their own money.
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 18-year-old is moving out. He must go to work to earn money and save every bit in order to pay his rent every month.
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, the high-school
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 will be more responsible.
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, my cousin just moved out and now she is much more responsible about her time and money than she did when she was still living with her parents constantly urging her to do things.
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, the
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. Without
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 supervision, some people may not stay on the right track. Society temptations are everywhere and if people are not educated enough, they may be lured into bad things. It is true that nowadays there are many cases of young criminals
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 things or doing drugs. To conclude, a rising number of 18-year-olds are moving out. It is a fact that
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 has both pros and cons, still, parents and their
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 should consider carefully if they want to move out.
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