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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #advertisements #products #lives
Advertising has become a part of our
life
, we have advertising all around us used to promote or
to
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apply
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brand a particular
product
 or service for a better
life
. Every idea is found through an
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advertisement
advertsiment
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advertisement
, it is
further
 developed from consumers feedback and
a new
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new products
a new product
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products
is
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are
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 invented with the hope it makes human
life
 easier and safer. New
products
 are being developed and updated by manufacturing giants all across the world but they will have no impact on human daily
life
 until and unless the
product
 is not advertised and taught about its use and purpose. If the
product
 is not
well advertised
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 people might find it
unnecessary
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an unnecessary
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 thing to buy and perhaps advertising is very important.
Electronical
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Electronic
products
such
 as homecare
products
 like mobile phones, computers and air conditioning are being more advertised because
such
products
has
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latest
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the latest
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 features and models and the
prodcuts
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products
 perform better and
effeciently
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efficiently
comparing
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 to previous models. Advertisement has become a trend and a
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life-changing
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life changing
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 tool. It plays with your emotions creating room for want and need. Once a
product
 is framed and advertised through various media
paltform
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platforms
platform
such
 as
on
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apply
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televeision
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television
, or any
devices
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device
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 like
smart phone
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smartphone
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 or computer connected to
internet
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the internet
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creates
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 access to
advertisement
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advertisements
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 to enter our
life
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lives
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 and
shapes
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shape
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 the
generation
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generation's
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 lifestyle . Creating
impact
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an impact
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 on the living standard and
every one
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everyone
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or
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of
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 the keeps following the trend to keep
life
 simple at their comfort zone.
Adverisement
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Advertisement
 has always helped
acknowledge
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us acknowledge
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about
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apply
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new
products
 that have improved our
day to day
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day-to-day
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life
 to make
life
 simple and create a better sustainable future. how advertisement increase sales
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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