Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Advertising has become a part of our

life

, we have advertising all around us used to promote or

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apply

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brand a particular

product

or service for a better

life

. Every idea is found through an

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advertsiment

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, it is

further

developed from consumers feedback and

a new

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new products

a new product

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products

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are

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invented with the hope it makes human

life

easier and safer. New

products

are being developed and updated by manufacturing giants all across the world but they will have no impact on human daily

life

until and unless the

product

is not advertised and taught about its use and purpose. If the

product

is not

well advertised

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people might find it

unnecessary

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an unnecessary

the unnecessary

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thing to buy and perhaps advertising is very important.

Electronical

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Electronic

products

such

as homecare

products

like mobile phones, computers and air conditioning are being more advertised because

such

products

has

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latest

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the latest

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features and models and the

prodcuts

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products

perform better and

effeciently

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efficiently

comparing

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compared

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to previous models. Advertisement has become a trend and a

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life-changing

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life changing

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life-changing

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tool. It plays with your emotions creating room for want and need. Once a

product

is framed and advertised through various media

paltform

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platforms

platform

such

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apply

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televeision

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television

, or any

devices

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device

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smart phone

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smartphone

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or computer connected to

internet

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the internet

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creates

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create

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access to

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

269 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
well-being

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