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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

#scientists #technology #experts #society #musicians #artists
In the past, till now there were only a few
artists
 who care to improve
technology
 and invent useful things and most
artists
such
 as musicians and painters are careless about modern world processes. I hefty agree with
this
 notion and in
this
 essay, I will tell you why. On the
one
 hand, humans like to do painting and other fields around it do not like to think about money and the benefits of their
work
.
However
,
artists
 are like parents who grow and take care of their sons which is their art and
work
 without asking for money because they love and believe in what they doing.
For example
, Van Gouge,
one
 of the greatest painters of all time, worked only for himself because he enjoyed drawing everything he could see.
As a result
, he died in poverty because no
one
 liked his perspective of the world.
Hence
, maybe we call these guys crazy or silly but something we cannot understand is these
people
 have a desire for their passion.
On the other hand
, mathematicians and engineers are more likely to see
technology
 improve and develop.
Thus
, these types of
people
 need to update themselves with
technology
 to use new gadgets in their fields and career.
For instance
, computer scientists have to
work
 with their computers and learn new coding languages to improve their
work
 and skills.
Therefore
,
people
 who need
technology
 for their
work
 will be happy if it goes more updated and better. To conclude, groups of
people
 who enjoy art fields do not need
technology
 the same as professionals in IT
as a result
technology
 improvement is useless for them. After thoroughly analyzing
this
 subject, in my opinion,
artists
 will attract to
technology
one
 day when they see how working with
technology
 is easy and it is better than their old-school equipment.
Submitted by jaberi.mahyar on

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  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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