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In many countries, people now wear western clothes such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In most
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the
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countries,
people
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 have an interest in western cultures. Because of globalization,
people
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 tend to try new styles of clothing
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 of their own orthodox ones.
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a negative development. 
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 of all, when
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 try to copy the other's
culture
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 and way of dressing, eating, and living,
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 are forgetting their history, traditions, and
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. In
India
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, men commonly wear a shirt and pants;
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, women wear
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saree. There are many reasons behind every dressing method. Because
India
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 has a tropical climate, most parts of
India
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 have a humid climate. Our ancestors used to wear cotton clothes because
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 the perfect dress for
India
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's climate. But
people
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 have the wrong assumption about western clothing.
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 in western countries,
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, wear coat suits on regular occasions because they need
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warm cloth to protect themselves from the cold weather.
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, some
people
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 do not understand
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, and they just follow the trend.
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,
people
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 lose their identity as they try to fit into an irrelevant
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.It is not good for the community because once they stop bothering about their
culture
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, they will soon forget their own mother tongue. To summarise
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 topic, as I mentioned earlier, there is always a negative development when
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 neglect their own ways of living.
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