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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

#influence #beings #world #ecosystem #extinction #species #loss #bio-diversity
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The opening statement explains that the impact of
people
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behavior
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 on the world’s ecosystem is causing the candidate species and loss of
bio-diversity
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biodiversity
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.I will write
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 essay about these problems and possible solutions. BODY PARAGRAPH 1 Take a look at, there are some causes; they are increasing population of
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, using resources unconsciously and
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 stealing their area.
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 population of
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 is a huge problem for
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 and
plants
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People
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 always use
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 and
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 for their own benefits like making drugs and eating their’s meat so if
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 will increase like that they will exhaust all of them.
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 If
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 continue to occupy
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 habitats how can they live
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, we are wasting our resources and
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 situation creates abysmal consequences. BODY PARAGRAPH 2 If I have to suggest some solutions
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 those problems,
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 the government must protect
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biodiversity with deterrent laws and penalties.
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, the citizens should be made aware
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 these problems and maybe make some volunteer projects and competitions. The population should be controlled and
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 other hand count of
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 and
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 must be increased. The government should not allow urban sprawl on the
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' living areas
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 of these rules
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 even if they die
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will breed again. CONCLUSION In conclusion, the impact of
people
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behavior
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 on the world’s ecosystem is causing the candidate species and loss of biodiversity because of us, we can stop
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 state with simple precautions. Everybody can do something. Everything is in our hands. We can fix
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 problem with my suggestions easily.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • overexploitation
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • ecosystems
  • species population
  • genetic diversity
  • environmental awareness
  • protected areas
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