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Many museum across the world charge an entry fee from all visitors. Some people agree that entry to the museum should be free. To what extent do you agree or disagree???

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some people believe that
museums
 should be free to visit,while others think that they should be charged for entrance. In
this
 essay, I will explain the benefits and drawbacks of both views.
Firstly
,if
museums
 charge for their admission,there will be enough
money
 for them to enhance their conditions for keeping ancient stuff in the museum.
For example
,using high-quality glasses for protecting the old objects in the
museums
, or devolving tools for increasing the security of precious objects against
the
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thieves will be much easier due to the
money
 earned from the public.
Moreover
. If more
money
 is earned by
museums
,they are able to allocate some budget for projects that lead to the discovery of ancient antiques that are extremely valuable
for
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 a country.
on the other hand
, by charging for admission to
museums
, people who are living in poorer conditions may not afford to buy a ticket to visit a museum. In conclusion,
although
 charging fees for
museums
 may affect the frequency of people visiting
museums
 ,I think the protection of ancient objects in
museums
 which may cost millions of dollars, should be a higher priority and
museums
 should earn
money
 from the public to satisfy their needs.
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