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Many museum across the world charge an entry fee from all visitors. Some people agree that entry to the museum should be free. To what extent do you agree or disagree???

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some people believe that
museums
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 should be free to visit,while others think that they should be charged for entrance. In
this
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 essay, I will explain the benefits and drawbacks of both views.
Firstly
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,if
museums
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 charge for their admission,there will be enough
money
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 for them to enhance their conditions for keeping ancient stuff in the museum.
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,using high-quality glasses for protecting the old objects in the
museums
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, or devolving tools for increasing the security of precious objects against
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thieves will be much easier due to the
money
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 earned from the public.
Moreover
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. If more
money
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 is earned by
museums
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,they are able to allocate some budget for projects that lead to the discovery of ancient antiques that are extremely valuable
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 a country.
on the other hand
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, by charging for admission to
museums
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, people who are living in poorer conditions may not afford to buy a ticket to visit a museum. In conclusion,
although
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 charging fees for
museums
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 may affect the frequency of people visiting
museums
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 ,I think the protection of ancient objects in
museums
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 which may cost millions of dollars, should be a higher priority and
museums
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 should earn
money
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 from the public to satisfy their needs.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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