More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In today's world, many species and creatures are in danger and some of them are only a few left in the wild. Most of these problems

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can protect

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. Extinction is a serious problem for biodiversity and

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the food cycle. Most

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have been extinct because of losing their houses and

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local areas where they search to find their food.

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destroy a lot of jungles every year to build and improve their urban cities which will cause problems for the creatures living there.

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, if we burn jungles and cut the trees, birds will die because they need to live in high places

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as trees.

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, they should change their living place and in

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process, most of them will die.

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, I know

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are brutal but, in the meantime, they can be helpful to

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and they can protect them. Professionals and scientists should search for those endangered

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them to make sure they are safe and have enough food to survive.

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, one unique and rare leopard is living in Iran and scientists believe there are only a few of them still alive,

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, they protected that area and did not permit the others to go there to make sure leopards will be safe.

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can change their behaviour towards nature to keep the natural environment and creatures living there safe by only protecting jungles, deserts and any other places in which species live.

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You have addressed the prompt by discussing the reasons for the extinction of wild animals and provided solutions on how to solve the problem. However, be sure to present a more balanced and detailed reasoning on both aspects.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear structure to your essay. However, ensure that your main points are organized logically to enhance the coherence of your essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

259 words

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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Your opinion

Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

Some people are making new friends by using socializing network website and Internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that people should make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people think that children should be homeschooled when they are very young, while others think it is better for them to attend kindergarden. To what extend do you agree or disagree?