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In some countries, more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college, university, or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Family plays an integral part in our life. From the day we open our eyes we find our
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 by our side. They teach us important lessons like right or wrong being loyal , being punctual , and being honest. There is no denying the fact that family plays the biggest role in our development. Nowadays, it's very common to see
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 living with their guardians after graduation or after even having a job. It's quite a controversial issue across the globe . Without any doubt , society is divided into two groups as per distinct mindsets of different
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. A fair amount of folk agreed with the
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 whether others opine because of some reason . Whether to agree or not it's a tough-provoking question. As far as I can see it's more justified to agree with the
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 that it has more advantages than disadvantages. In the upcoming ,paragraphs I will not only shed light on both sides but
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 elaborate on my point of view . If we have a deep look we are able to find numerous reasons why a fair amount of
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 think it's good to stay with
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 . The
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 and foremost reason behind
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 is emotional
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 for youngsters . In
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 fast pace ,world
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 have become human machines. They have so many responsibilities . Sometimes it becomes very hard to handle . In
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 situations, family
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 is very important .they motivated us and give us moral
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 . Another striking benefit is we don't have to do house chores all alone .when we live in a family we divided the work so none can feel pressurized.
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 but not least it's very beneficial for the
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 generation because children can learn so many things when they can spend time with their grandparents. There's no denying the fact that old
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 are like a storehouse of knowledge .they are much more experienced so we have so many things to learn from them.
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 , in the case of an emergency family comes
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. So it's always better to have them by our side . On the paradoxical side, some
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 opine the
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 for a few reasons .
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, they find it difficult to cooperate with old
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 due to lots of responsibilities.
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, when young
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 live with their
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 they find it difficult to have their privacy.
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 , those who live with old
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 can't enjoy their life the way they want .as the
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 get old they become moody and dependent on their children . So young
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 have to sacrifice their dreams to
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 their
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 . In conclusion,
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 there are some demerits yet it is more justified to agree with the
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 . It is more beneficial to stay with
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 after graduation or after getting a job because it helps to stronger the bonding .so
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 suppose the advantages outweigh the disadvantages .

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